i just read ur fic...2 nights straight, since i'm working in the morning. i love them u go girl!!! can't wait for the others update since i have finished reading sho's part i love them too...u bright up my day TQ
Joined: 20 Dec 2007 Posts: 100 Location: Wild Wild Manila
Posted: Thu May 22, 2008 3:29 pm Post subject:
What a wonderful story! You managed to make me, an unrepentant slasher and lover of Ohmiya, read a romantic story with a female original character! And thoroughly enjoy and love it! Bravo!
I shall go off to read The Wages of Manging Sense.
Joined: 15 Feb 2008 Posts: 403 Location: writing an epic series while watching Ohno paint
Posted: Thu May 22, 2008 7:08 pm Post subject:
Thank you for taking the time to read and leave a review. I earnestly hope that you will find this series entertaining. *bows lowly*
Currently, I am working on a few other things. Hopefully if all goes well, I may ventured into an AU fic with the boys and their respective partners. But that is for the future. Any immediate plans will have to deal with completing the series.
Joined: 30 Apr 2008 Posts: 340 Location: syd, australia or hong kong (& regaining strength to continue my fanfic)
Posted: Fri Jul 18, 2008 4:47 am Post subject:
Dear mmesstrange,
first, please permit me to compliment on what a tremendously excellent job you have completed. i was so glued to my computer monitor or mobile phone screen for a consecutive 12 hours and i do not regret a single mini-second of it. your story is thoroughly enjoyable and i wish to discuss it more detail.
Aspects of the story i find that is worth rounds (yes plural) of applause:
1. language
i was totally taken aback by your use of words which are used in great care and expell their maximum potential and meaning, bringing not only detail but humour, character and style. they immediately remind me of the Classics I read and indeed, your writing is certainly worthy of that level of many writers in the hall of famous if i may name a few such as Louisa May Alcott, Jane Austen, Charles Dickens etc and read my word, i am NOT exaggerating. clearly, i suspect you have done a great detail in research and proof-reading to have polish your work to this refined state and for that i salute you for your dedication, time, effort and professional manner which all writers and possible-future-writers should aim at striving. *salutes with admiration*
2. dialogue
you remind me instantly of Jane Austin. Absolutely witty! I adore the sarcasm between Nino and Alys which are simply priceless. i laughed so hard at times that i literally became unlady-like but it was worth it. XD oh and the arguement was simply breath-taking, yes, breath-taking, no joke, honest.
3. Story
permit me to say that you have made a creative, amusing yet fitting couple. i first thought the idea of an uni sensei with nino a bit out of the ordinary and surprise , surprise it turned out fabulous. i won't say the plot is of equal excitement because to me, it is at times predictable. what was unpredictable and amazing is how you used this simple plot and utilised it by manipulating the characters you created and adding in excellent dialogue to fashion it into a masterpiece. THAT made me speechless.
4. characters
like i said in point 3 but really character background esp Ayls is just too good. you must have spent hours pondering how to draw up her past! it is so well put and detail! never in my wildest imagination would i ever thought to that level that she had such a past. yes , i was dumbfounded when i knew the truth. oh and nino. well, i love the way you write out his train of thoughts which spill out every emotion and devilish idea he has. wonderful.... really, but the best part has got to be the fact that both are extremely stingy and you've shown that through multiple dialogue and descriptions even in the littlest of things. you really paid a great deal of attention to detail and yes i'm thoroughly am impressed.
Areas that may need improvement:
can't think of any except
maybe it's me but i want some so mushy stuff, i can't get enough of the romance in the story. yes, i guess i 'm a bit greedy and hentei which i shouldn't....... *blushes*
the omake is another area i want to point out. to be frank, your story x harry potter = maximum hilarious and constant ROFL
to conclude, you left me in awe
and begging for more
therefore,
i am now moving to the story of sho.
Joined: 15 Feb 2008 Posts: 403 Location: writing an epic series while watching Ohno paint
Posted: Sat Jul 19, 2008 10:22 am Post subject:
Dear jl2020,
I am delighted and honoured that you have elected to read my modest offerings. My writing is by no means the best of the authors featured on these pages, nor the most amusing. It is enough for me that readers are interested enough to plough through my plots and words.
Writing, research and edting are extensions of what I do, which may account for my personal stylistic nuances. Occasionally, I miss some words and make errors, but at times, I suffer from the illness of being unable to see my most glaring mistakes. Any such inconvenience to the reader, I acknowledge as mine and humbly apologise for it. My somewhat restrained style of prose has been deemed coy, so I am glad you found enough humour and character development to make reading these offerings worth your while.
Alas, I am but a failed novelist and poetess. My writings have been declared simultaneously to be 'uninspiring', 'coy', 'unmarketable', 'obscure', and whatnot; and various unsolicited manuscripts returned. However, such is life in an acquisitive world where money is the reigning monarch.
I write from observation, very much like Kujo Sora whom I have created for Jun-kun, and who we will meet by and by in the Jun's story. But how far I have captured the personalities of the esteemed gentlemen is still a debatable point. And as for the ladies, I try to make them as ordinary as possible for such women do make up 99% of the female population. Yet, as some of my friends have pointed out, there is a little bit of the author in every piece of writing he/she produces, I expect I am the same as well.
Ah, the dialogues... I believe words are a woman's greatest weapons, and I use them with my ladies who though not exceptional beauties are admirable specimens of womenhood in their own right. Furthermore, it is also my personal belief that a true lady never enters into a battle of wits with an unarmed person. One of my dear friends, Junko of AraShe informs me that I speak like Alys, which is something I assume she means kindly. I do call lying 'being economical with the truth', and I do snap at people in the same way. However, Alys is a far more elegant female than her creator, as are all my other ladies of Kaoru, Chiaki, Renee-Caroline and Sora.
I pictured for Nino and Alys a meeting of minds and souls rather than a meeting of two people in love because I already have a uxorious type with Sho vis-a-vis his logical, sensible Chiaki; a loving but shy couple in Ohno and Kaoru; a comfortable friendship that led to a comfortable kind of romantic love for Aiba and Renee-Caroline; and an equal partnership of hardheaded characters for Jun and Sora.
The often times acerbic exchange between Nino and Alys is what makes them tick; they are very much devoted to one another (as the other characters frequently point out) but they both have so many insecurities and are such dissembling and wary characters that it is sometimes difficult for them to say what they mean. However, their insecurities are very real. Alys is conscious that she is a few years older and believes that her freeloader would prefer a younger and prettier woman; similarly, Nino worries that he is not nearly a good enough match for her intellectually. However, in very small ways in this story and in the others, I try to demonstrate through their actions that they are very attached to each other, and are a good fit because they are very much alike.
Let me apologise for the predictable plot, but this is a still a light romance (somewhat) and all such plots are rather formulaeic. However, it does not change the fact that I adore both my Alys and Nino very much and allow them to run rampant in my demented mind.
As previously mentioned, I draw my characters from observation and from experience, so the backgrounds of my girls are all rather realistic from my point of view. Nino is who is he, and Alys is who she is - creatures who think the way they do because it is how they know how to survive.
Ah... the romance and mush factor. Alys and Nino aren't terribly romantic, I'm afraid. But they do care a great deal for each other. It was intimated in Sho's story and in Nino's epilogue that they have consummated their relationship on a physical level. Despite that, they are more interested in each other's minds than the physical aspect. Furthermore, I can't bring myself to be so ungenteel as to write explicit scenes of physical intimacy. And when the Ninomiyas do go overboard with the physical intimacy, the readers know something is up. They are, as you will find in Aiba's story, shockingly normal like an old, married couple at home.
Currently, there are plans for a sequel that will come after all the five stories, but that is still in the planning stages and I do not know whether that will come to fruition. Hopefully, it will.
My omakes are lunactic ramblings, completely unserious and born from the conversations I have with AraShe... Wait till you see the omake for Ohno's story...
Once again, thank you so much for taking the time to read and review. I am truly touched to have drawn such a positive response from you, and hope to continue to meet your expectations.
Just want to say that this is absolutely amazing. I'm usually not a huge fan of Nino, as compared to my love for Sho and Aiba, but your story makes me want to continue reading and ta-da! I read it all in one sitting. A truly amazing story =) Thanks for giving me the joys and laughters when reading your story, I especially love their witty comebacks =]
Thank you so much for your hard work. You are extremely talented. Its refreshing to see fanfiction that has been so well written with a coherent plot. I loved all the British references you used, it made me smile even though the rainy English weather has forced me inside.
Great job, now i am off to read Sho's story because i am hooked
Joined: 15 Feb 2008 Posts: 403 Location: writing an epic series while watching Ohno paint
Posted: Fri Oct 10, 2008 12:00 pm Post subject:
ananya2003 - Thank you for taking the time to read this modest offering. I simply write what I know, and from observation of people. The Ninomiyas have been most amusing to conceptualise and to write, and I am very glad you share my affection for them. Thank you once again.
Joined: 15 Feb 2008 Posts: 403 Location: writing an epic series while watching Ohno paint
Posted: Thu Oct 23, 2008 3:15 pm Post subject:
My personal style may be attributed to the fact that I am a much older fan of the lads, and work professionally as an editor (in English and French), translator (French, Mandarin, German, English), part-time lecturer in literature and politics, and academic ghostwriter.
Thank you for your interest in my modest writing. It isn't easily to read through in one sitting because my writing style would not be classified as 'modern' or 'accessible'. That you found this tale amusing is enough for me. Thank you once again.
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